Changing focus

Red Brick

I wrote a single page short story for a competition (which came nowhere, thanks for asking) and decided to enter it into another, but not until I’d made some changes. Rather than a complete rewrite, I decided to see if I could tweak and expand on the original text, and change the entire focus of the piece at the same time.

Here’s the original (Red Brick) which was written as a 300 word single page short, and here’s the revised version (also called Red Brick). The title remains the same, but its meaning is taken a step further. See which (if any) you prefer.

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About djpaterson

Reader, Writer, Arithmeticer. Not always in that order.
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